IELTS Writing Task 1 – Bar chart samples (Cont)

Thêm một bài “Sample” nữa về dạng bài “Bar chart” trong IELTS Writing Task 1 nữa nhé.

The bar chart shows why young men were motivated to watch Formula 1 in March 2007. It is clear that there was a wide variety of responses and enjoying the excitement was the most common reason among respondents.

Firstly, the majority of viewers watched because they found it exciting as there was just over 50% of men giving this as a reason. The speed of the cars was the second most popular response with only 2% less. Forty-four percent of males watched because they were interested in the technology involved in the sport, whereas only 36% was the figure for those who had an interest in the drivers and the competitive nature of the sport.

Other reasons, such as the strategies and teamwork used, were nearly half as popular when compared to the excitement felt. Far fewer people still watched for the visual aspects, such as sport’s modern image, glamour and branding, at 22%, 16% and 15% respectively. One of the least favored reasons was because it was their favorite sport and men watching Formula 1 for its fairness and honesty accounted for a mere 9%.

Only 7% gave no reason for following F1. 

Để tham khảo về cách thay đổi diễn đạt số liệu dạng bài bar chart trong ielts writing task 1, các bạn có thể tham khảo tại đây.

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IELTS Writing Task 1 – Bar chart samples

Một bài mẫu IELTS Writing Task 1 dạng bài Bar chart để cả nhà học cách tổ chức ý và sử dụng ngôn từ phù hợp nhé!

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries.

The chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people’s ages.

The greatest problem for young people aged 18 to 34 is forming friendships, a problem experienced by 46 percent of the people in this age group. However, only 36 percent of 35 to 54-year-old find it hard to make friends, while even fewer people over 55 (23 percent) have this problem.

54 percent of the older age group find learning to speak the local language the most problematic. In comparison, the youngest age group finds this easier, and the percentage who have problems learning the language is much lower at 29 percent.

In contrast to their language-learning difficulties, only 22 percent of people in the oldest age group have trouble finding accommodation. However, this is the second most significant problem for the other two age groups with 39 to 40 percent of the people in each group finding it hard.

In general, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the percentage of older people who find language learning difficult is much higher than the others.

Sample trên dài 192 chữ, hơi dài một chút nhưng vẫn ở mức ổn đối với một bài writing IELTS Task 1. Bài mẫu này có đủ cả mở – thân – kết rất đáng để học tập. Mọi người có thể thấy tác giả đã chuyển phần nhận xét overview xuống thành conclusion, một cách làm khá lạ khi xét tới nhiều template được các  sĩ tửIELTS sử dụng trong giai đoạn học – ôn – thi IELTS, nhưng không làm mất bố cục hay tính mạch lạc của bài. Đáng học hỏi đấy chứ phải không cả nhà  ?

Hy vọng bài viết này sẽ giúp cải thiện kỹ năng ielts writing task 1, đặc biệt là dạng Bar chart. Chúc các bạn thành công !

Ghi nguồn www.msdiepielts.com khi đăng tải lại bài viết này.
Link: IELTS WRITING TASK 1 – Bar chart samples

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IELTS Writing Task 1 – Cấu trúc mô tả số liệu bar chart

Khác với Line Graph, việc mô tả Fixed Time Bar Chart (biểu đồ cột không chứa thay đổi qua thời gian) không có nhiều cấu trúc biến đổi để sử dụng. Do đó, học sinh thường gặp khó khăn trong việc ghi điểm cao cho tiêu chí Grammatical Range. Bài viết này sẽ chia sẻ tips quan trọng giúp các bạn có thể sử dụng các cấu trúc ngữ pháp linh hoạt khi làm bài.

1. IELTS Bar Chart Sample answer 1 (lặp diễn đạt):

… Overall, Acme spent more on advertising than Famous. Both companies spent the most money on television promotion, with Acme spending $250,000 while Famous spent $200,000. Acme spent the second highest amount on newspaper advertising, at approximately $ 125,000, whereas Famous spent only about $ 75,000 on this type. In contrast, Famous spent more on the Internet than Acme, at $ 100,000 and $ 50,000 respectively. Both companies spent the least money on billboard promotions, at about $ 25,000 each.

2. Các cách thay đổi mô tả số liệu trong IELTS Bar Chart

• Clause, at + số/ with + Ving/noun phrase

Eg1: Toyota spent quite much money on TV advertising last year, at 3 million dollars

• There + be + số

Eg2: There was 3 million dollars being spent on TV advertising last year

• The amount/ number/percentage + be + số

Eg3: The amount of money used for TV commercials by Toyota last year was 3 million dollars

• Số + be + the amount/number/percentage

Eg4: 3 million dollars was the amount of money that Toyota used last year for TV commercials

• Sử dụng các động từ thường: To account for/constitute/amount to/ occupy

Eg5: Toyota’s expenditure on TV advertising last year accounted for 3 million dollars.

• Sử dụng các diễn đạt số liệu thay thế như: the figure for/the data of để tránh lặp chủ ngữ

Eg6: The figure for TV advertising last year was 3 million dollars.

3. IELTS Bar Chart Sample answer 2 (đã biến đổi diễn đạt số liệu và sử dụng 3 loại so sánh):

…Overall, Acme’s expenditure on advertising was more than Famous’s. It is also noticeable that both companies used the biggest amount of money on television commercials, with Acme spending $250,000 while the figure for Famous was $200,000. There was $ 125,000 being allocated by Acme on newspaper advertising, the second most common type, whereas $75,000 was the amount that Famous used. In contrast, Famous spent twice as much on the Internet as Acme, at $ 100,000 and $ 50,000 respectively. Meanwhile, billboard promotions in both enterprises accounted for the smallest amount of about $ 25,000 each.

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